Original: http://answers.yahoo.com/question/index;鈥?/a>
Revised:
Call out, and I鈥檒l call back to you.
Each word whispered softly.
Use your voice,
And a distant sound responds.
I am never welcomed
By those sneaking in the night.
I am an uninvited guest
Barging into an anguished mind.
I live within one鈥檚 heart,
Soaring through their emptiness.
I bound from wall to wall,
Then fade into nothingness
Invisible,
Unable to say things of my own,
Unable to speak.
In the shadows,
In the light.
I am no one,
Yet here I am,
Hiding.
Without you, I cannot be.
Which do you like better? Anything else I should do or change?
Want to read my other poem?
http://answers.yahoo.com/question/index;鈥?/a>
My poem, %26quot;Echo%26quot;, revised?
End the poem at %26quot;nothingness.%26quot; The rest is redundant. Give the poem a title, such as %26quot;Without You.%26quot; You have amazing talent.
My poem, %26quot;Echo%26quot;, revised?
this is nice... add some harmony and make a song
it is good
Beautiful poem
wow I really like that...if you have anymore can you
E-mail them to me at girlygirl767@yahoo.com
Thanks
good. you understood exactly what I was trying to say. much better
This is confusing but very good.
very cool i loved it!
I really like it ( :
lovely poem..
Your poem is great! You have a true gift for writing poetry.
that was a pretty good poem =)
I like this. Very mysterious.
