ok so their is this essay that we have to turn in and i did mine oh anne frank and how she matured through the time she spent in hiding.....could you please help me? just tell me if i need to change anything or if its good or bad....thanks in advanced!!
ANNE FRANK RTL ESSAY #8
Through hardships in our life we tend to grow out of our childish ways and become more aware of the world around us. Chains of circumstances shape our persona do to certain assets in which one will change, develop, and finally mature into a grander person. When we endure these horrific events we go through a transformation of not only the mind but the soul and we derive a better understanding of how life really is outside the illusion of perfection we make it out to be. This is proved true in “The Diary of Anne Frank” written by Frances Goodrich and Albert Hackett. It is based on a story like no other in which a young girl confides in her diary about her inner most thoughts, wishes, and feelings. She describes what it is like to be forced to go into hiding for fear of her life, and have to live for two years in constant apprehensiveness that they might be found and charged for a crime punishable by death. It was through these circumstances beyond one’s control that Anne went through a great change on the outlook of life and became enlightened in the cruelties of the world.
Anne Frank lived a carefree life up until the holocaust. Even when her family and her along with four other people were forced to go into hiding she did not quite understand the extremities that she was soon to face, “but you can’t do that they’ll arrest you if you go out without your star.” This alone is an example of how na?ve Anne still was at the time after having been obligated to leave all that she held close to her heart. At the beginning she took it as if it were merely a “vacation”, and did not completely comprehend the seriousness of the war. She once told her mother “I only want some fun, someone to laugh and dance with”. Once again she has demonstrated that she is in a way blind to the enormity of the issue they where currently facing. After all that she had been obligated to abandon everything, she took it lightly to the heart.
She acquired some better understanding through time in which she began to have a greater insight not only about herself but of the world and people around her. Anne confesses to Peter, “I’d like to go back to it for a few days or a week. But after that I know I’d be bored to death. I think more seriously know.” Through this we can tell that Anne has indeed has gathered a larger realization of the magnitude of the issue at hand. Her thoughts on life have definitely matured since the beginning of the conflict. Anne still doesn’t loose faith even after all that she has been forced to go through, “I’m going to be a famous dancer or singer…or something wonderful”. Even though they have been put in a tragic situation, she has not lost all hope and becomes still a bigger person for it. She will not let the catastrophic times they are going through crush her dreams and wishes of the future she hopes to have. Anne derives an enhanced comprehension due to the hard times her, along with everyone else, have had to put through in order to survive.
Anne herself, matured very rapidly in these two crucial years where she went from thirteen to fifteen. She once said “But Peter, if you’d only look at it as a part of a great pattern…that were just a little minute in the life…” Through this we can presume she has acquired a greater understanding of the universe and all who live in it. She knows that the time that she has on the earth is only a spec of dust compared to the immensity of life itself. Anne understands that her life is not of greater importance than somebody else’s, and knows that she will only get one chance at the life she currently has. Therefore she knows to make the most of what she has. She stated once “I’m going to be remarkable! I’m going to Paris!” This again demonstrates her optimism and how she has grown as a person not only from the outside but also within. Through the good and the bad Anne has matured somewhat since the beginning of this experience.
Through the two treacherous years Anne Frank was forced to live along with seven other people during the holocaust, she matured with wisdom far beyond any other girl her age would have. Her insight on the holocaust and what innocent people were forced to suffer through is one of the most moving commentaries on the war and its impact on human beings ever read. She once wrote “In spite of everything, I still believe that people are really good at heart.” These words of wisdom are an example of how much hope she still had. She had faith in people, and did not judge everyone the same due to the actions of one man. Through the menacing times she had been forced to face she discovered a greater truth about life.
Im stressing!!! help with english paper please! (anne frank)?
Wow, a pretty tall order to critique even a five paragraph essay in this forum, but here goes: Overall the language is strong, you have some very good ideas, and the essay has strong, linear movement from opening to conclusion. That's good. You do have a few (well, maybe a few more than a few) grammatical errors, (some run-on sentences and a couple of spots where a semicolon rather than a comma is needed), and a couple of spelling errors, but these are fairly easy to correct. Overall I would consider it a good first draft, but it needs some tightening and polishing. I would make the introduction a little less general to start. I don't think the third person %26quot;we%26quot; serves you very well in the opening. Most of %26quot;us%26quot; do not undergo anything close to the %26quot;horrific events%26quot; that Anne Frank endured. If you want to keep it this way, you might want to tone down the rhetoric a bit in reference to the universal %26quot;we%26quot;. In other words, say something to illustrate your point that hardship in general often seems to have a maturing effect on developing adolescents, and that nowhere is this illustrated more poignantly than in the story of Anne Frank.
Personally, I think that Anne Frank' s growth and maturation throughout her ordeal is anything but typical; that it is in fact quite extraordinary given the circumstances. But that would be a different thesis entirely . . . That she was able to achieve such growth and spiritual development in spite of her circumstances, rather than due to them. I'm not arguing in favor of one thesis over the other, though. Your thesis is entirely valid, and definitely workable. Good luck with your paper, and keep up the good work.
Im stressing!!! help with english paper please! (anne frank)?
This is a good and thought out essay and it is well written so well done. The only thing I would question is the fact that you said Anne lived a carefree life. This I am not sure is the right phrasing you should use. If you have a look at Anne's entry on 20 June 1942 she describes what was happening to the Jewish people because of Hitler. I think carefree suggests that she was completely naive of what was happening to the Jewish community which she was not. Just have a think about that. Its a pity I am not your English or History teacher, I would give you a good mark!
dont stress so much it shortens ur lifethis is a good paper just run through on spelling and grammar some teachers are really anal about that
i think this is an awesome paper!! very thought provoking and easy to relate to!! nice work!! :)
Honestly, I think you did a good job. Nothing seems to be incorrect. Just remember to check for spelling, grammar, and if your paper makes sense! That will help you not stress as much!
I hope I helped!
