Sunday, 5 June 2011

Could you please help me to check if there is any grammar errors in the following passage?

Ideology and Hegemony are two theories that exist in the society these days and they influence people unconsciously in many different ways. One of them is using films. This is the most obvious and effective way to influence people. The reason is the technologies are well-developed nowadays; therefore people have the ability to receive and consume films without any difficulty. As a result they are exposing to huge amount of films each year so it will be very likely to change and influence one’s mind, concepts and opinions. Ideology and hegemony are very easily be hidden in the films and they will convey different messages. In the case of the film “Letters from Iwo Jima”, it convey the notion that America is superior and better than Japan. “Letters from Iwo Jima” is produced by an American producer called Clint Eastwood in 2006. This film is about the invasion of Iwo Jima during World War two by America. It captures the Japanese version of the invasion whereas the other film, “Flag of ou|||%26quot;could you please help me to check if there is any grammar errors in the following passage?%26quot; ...%26gt; %26quot;could you please help me to check if there are any grammar errors in the following passage?%26quot;





just quickly:





%26quot; the society %26quot; should be %26quot;society %26quot;





%26quot;they are exposing%26quot; ....%26gt; %26quot;they are exposed%26quot; (watch your tenses)





%26quot;they%26quot; doesn%26#039;t relate to %26quot;one%26#039;s%26quot;, it should be %26quot;their%26quot;





%26quot;are very easily be hidden%26quot; ...%26gt; %26quot;are very easily hidden%26quot; or %26quot;can be very easily be hidden%26quot;





%26quot;hidden in the films%26quot; ....%26gt; %26quot;hidden in films%26quot;





%26quot;it convey the notion%26quot; ......%26gt; %26quot;it conveys the notion%26quot;





%26quot;it captures the Japanese version of the invasion%26quot; might read better as %26quot;it portrays the Japanese version of the invasion%26quot;








I%26#039;m sure others will help with other points I%26#039;ve not mentioned.|||There%26#039;s an error on the first line. I stopped reading there.|||I have noticed two things:


1- try to change %26quot;that%26quot; in the first sentnce.


2-World War two can be changed to %26quot; World War II .%26quot;





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