Can you help me with my sonnet about peace?

I just wrote this sonnet, but it doesn%26#039;t have a lyrical quality to it.


Peace, oh Peace, come out wherever you are


The fight for you has become so extreme


The sincere idea of you seems so far


You show up in fashion, doodles and dreams


But an abundance of absence in one鈥檚 mind


We crave you in our hearts, but don鈥檛 act for you


Let鈥檚 bring you to life, you鈥檙e needed in mankind


We鈥檒l start off simply to make you come true


by merely respecting the opinions


Of one another and take pride in that


And we shall try to end all of the hate


We鈥檒l become equals and avoid dominion


We鈥檒l then avoid conflict, deaths and combat


The key to peace is to negotiate





Is it good? How can i change it?|||use the iambic pentameter





U/U/U/U/U/





U being un-emphasized and / being emphasized also try using the format





abab cdcd efef gg





ea of the letters a line and the end of ea. line rhymes with the other of the same





example:





Shall I compare thee to a Summer%26#039;s day?


Thou art more lovely and more temperate:


Rough winds do shake the darling buds of May,


And Summer%26#039;s lease hath all too short a date:


Sometime too hot the eye of heaven shines,


And oft%26#039; is his gold complexion dimm%26#039;d;


And every fair from fair sometime declines,


By chance or nature%26#039;s changing course untrimm%26#039;d:


But thy eternal Summer shall not fade


Nor lose possession of that fair thou owest;


Nor shall Death brag thou wanderest in his shade,


When in eternal lines to time thou growest:


So long as men can breathe, or eyes can see,


So long lives this, and this gives life to thee.|||Doodle seems a bit...out, maybe you could replace it with something else.


Try to match the syllables in sentences and it will have more of a lyrical quality in my opinion.|||A sonnet, or to be more precise, an Elizabethan or Shakespearian soneet is 14 lines. 3 stanzas of 4 lines each and a final stanza of 2 lines. A rhyme scheme of abab cdcd efef gg. Written in iambic pentameter, which is 10 syllable with alternating stressed syllable on even numbers


da dah da dah da dah da dah da dah.





try again.